In my manuscript – I’ll call it that – I now have as many questions as I have definitive decisions.
The character watched the character – from how far away? – she knows he is there – how can she tell? – how far into his watching of her does she first begin to know? – does she finally see the bushes over there moving? – over where?
What does he see? What is in the way of his vision?
Where has he come from? Why? He knows she won’t . . . and so he . . .